Thursday, January 31, 2008

My Piece

This is a peice I wrote yesterday. I know it's probably not so good, but can you please read it?

Good thing, too. If she hadn't’t put the Herbs on, oh, what could have happened! Her arm would probably be so painful…
To be precise, *some name* would have wailed in pain, and said “Oh, please, now can I have some?” And she would have sat down, kneeling, pleading, with her hands exactly two feet above the floor. She would beg them for exactly thirty-eight seconds before her parents gave in, and took two minutes sharp to bring up the little pinprick of a jar to her. And yes, until they gave in, her arm was so painful. But only six and three quarters times as painful.
Yes. *some name* confirmed, it would be much worse, much worse in that other world. Where was it, anyway? Where was that place, where she would not take the Herbs, where her father did not accept the job offer, where she even cheated on a test? She knew it couldn't’t be near, though. Probably in a whole different universe.
But now, in this world, not in another universe, not in another galaxy, not even in another town, *some name* was about to go to sleep, here on Earth.
Suddenly, she woke up. Or was it she who woke? Somebody woke, somebody who did not deserve to have the power even to wake. Somebody in another universe, in another galaxy, in another town.

If it's not to much trouble, could you leave a comment about my peice where it says Comments at the bottom of the entry? Especially what I should name my character. Thanks so much.
~ Anna

25 comments:

Annapurna said...

Please, Please, Please give me a name.

Anonymous said...

hmmm...how about...
Ana Maria or
Katy or
Mary or
i dont kno
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Fred?

Anonymous said...

no but now it looks seriously coolio.
like really cool.
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do you mind if you post my story? or at least part of it...its nearing 14 pgs long...

Annapurna said...

ya... just email it 2 me again. I don't feel like looking it up in my swamp of email...

Anonymous said...

ha. lol. but im warning you. its looooooooooooooonnnnnnnnnnnggggggggggg.

Anonymous said...

what about Bob

Anonymous said...

I mean as a name for your character.

Jill said...

what about Malorie, Annie, or maybe even Annavada Purnaparty?!

Anyways, what happened to Montweens?

Jill said...

who the heck is anonymous?

Annapurna said...

what do y mean, wut happened to montweens. yeah, very funny anonymous, but enough boys in my LA class have already named themselves bob, bobette, bobilina, bobina, or robert. No thanks. anyway, who are you, no offense?

Annapurna said...

Yo jill... wuts up with Malorie? do you WANT my person to sound fat?

Jill said...

i didn't know that the name Malorie made a character sound fat!

i mean, you decorated it orisinal style! it lookes so awesome!

Jill said...

how did you do it? you know, the background, how can you get it on the blog from orisinal?

Jill said...

also, could you fill the whole page with this background? or will you just keep it half paged?

Annapurna said...

Ah, my friend, it is not from Orisinal. It is from Strawberry. My mom worked with it for awhile, but the most she could get was that. She tinkered with the Settings thing, in the Background category. Looks good don't it?

Annapurna said...

Anonymous, who are you? Do we even know you?

Jill said...

yeah it does.

Jill said...

where is strawberry?

Anonymous said...

Yes you know me annapurna

Annapurna said...

ANONYMOUS!!!! You are freaking me n my friends out and you're just plain old PATTY!!!! Evil!!! Scaring people like that. You should be ashamed of yourself :P. Anyway, it's strawberry heavens, smart one!

Anonymous said...

you spelled "piece" ron. i kno. kinda off topic...but its true. name it...Lily...or...yea

Anonymous said...

if i feel like being anonymous,i can and you better respect my decision.

:P

Anonymous said...

who is mc?

Anonymous said...

dahhhhhhhhh! i still can't get over how this is such an awesome start to a story! ingenius! simply ingenius! a story "worthy of Athena" if i were to quote from the "Lightning Theif"

Unknown said...

*cough,cough*
Flora says Lightning Thief is zzzzz
Srry Mer.